Am I a "good" Poet?

[Im_Aspire 0]

Am I a "Good" Poet?

(feel free to use any of thus work, just inform me on this thread)

 

I Need Someone

 

I need someone to hold me tight

Through dark of night,

Who won’t go ’way

At break of day.

 

Someone whose love will mend the seams

Of broken dreams,

And give me back

The trust I lack.

 

For love, it holds the magic key

To set me free,

To heal my soul

And make me whole.

 

 

 

My Body

 

my

body

is

a

walking representation

the outward visual caption

of what it means

to be

me

from the

outside

looking

in

at times I hide

from you but mostly

what you see is

what you will get

 

 

 

Scream of Silence

 

Encompassed by grief, as darkness surrounds,

That deep inner scream of silence's greed;

Life's knocks and falls hit with a startling scream,

A man on his knees, drowned tears of sorrow.

 

Life path alight with true maternal star,

Nursing the ailments of a childhood grown;

A wise word spoken and a strength to lean,

Guidance only sought on her apron strings.

 

Smiles of kindness held the children's esteem,

A higher branch on their family tree;

Fear now threatens their peaceful existence,

The safety net's cast to capture his fall.

 

Death has stolen living ties of Love's bond,

Free from suffering, tomorrow's sun's warmth.

[Otherworldly 2]

Scream of Silence

 

Encompassed by grief, as darkness surrounds,

That deep inner scream of silence's greed;

Life's knocks and falls hit with a startling scream,

A man on his knees, drowned tears of sorrow.

 

Life path alight with true maternal star,

Nursing the ailments of a childhood grown;

A wise word spoken and a strength to lean,

Guidance only sought on her apron strings.

 

Smiles of kindness held the children's esteem,

A higher branch on their family tree;

Fear now threatens their peaceful existence,

The safety net's cast to capture his fall.

 

Death has stolen living ties of Love's bond,

Free from suffering, tomorrow's sun's warmth.

 

Sounds like an average day of jailbreak.

[Im_Aspire 0]

Sounds like an average day of jailbreak.

 

0.o what?!

 

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Ahah random post oth? I don't get it....

[Otherworldly 2]

 

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[/color]Ahah random post oth? I don't get it....

 

It's as I said it.

When you wrote that I thought of jailbreak, but in a deep sense. Your childhood gone as you rot in jail getting shot during FRLR

[Im_Aspire 0]

Ooh, well what the ♥♥♥♥ does the "my body" poem have to do with JB xD

 

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I do, kind of see where you are comming from. But in the mean time i need to get to sleep, and dream about someone gifting me Nuclear Dawn on steam... <3? xD

[Speechluss 1]

Ooh, well what the ♥♥♥♥ does the "my body" poem have to do with JB xD

 

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I do, kind of see where you are comming from. But in the mean time i need to get to sleep, and dream about someone gifting me Nuclear Dawn on steam... <3? xD

 

IM TRYING lol and this would soun legit as a rap

[Im_Aspire 0]

 

IM TRYING lol and this would soun legit as a rap

 

:O thanks, i only get B's in poetry though >:|

[Heisenberg 1]

I like it. Really depressing though. :./

[Im_Aspire 0]

Yeah, i usualy write poetry when i am depressed, just another way of venting.

[sexypedocone 0]

yo body is a wundaland baby